THE SIX WORD POEM...This week's blog entry is easy. You have to create a 6 word poem with any theme related to the environment. The rules of the six word poem? It has 6 words. In this case, you also should focus on some theme of nature. Here is an example:
Birds, water, the ocean calls me.
Here is another: The fire destroys, green grass brown.
See the pattern? 6 words...environmental theme.
Create a 6 word poem and then comment on others that you see on here. Easy, right?
Dark, deep, the sea so mysterious.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the ocean as mysterious. Even though this poem only has 6 words (like all of ours will) I feel as though I can visualize the deep ocean floor with so many things yet to be discovered. Thanks for sharing this with us!
DeleteShort, but to the point. I think your poem captures the very essence of the secrets the sea may hide. It is a mysterious place that we, to this day, still don’t know much about. With only six words I was able to visualize the deep ocean floor where many undiscovered wonders rest. An excellent poem; thanks for sharing!
DeleteI enjoy the, pause, after each of the first two words. Its dynamic, as to the picture one can create in the mind. Like, A Captain, sitting at the helm, setting off for the long voyage. A thought breaks his concentration, "Dark, deep, the sea so mysterious...", he shakes it away. Back now, focused on his task. He knows the crew depends on, him. His feet must stand firmly at the bow, as if he were on dry land...
Deleteanyways...that's nowhere near how powerful those six little words can be. Thanks for sharing.
I love how you described the ocean as mysterious by saying dark and deep. It's amazing how a vast majority of the ocean has not yet been discovered. They say about 95% is unexplored, especially of the ocean floor. Great work. I liked it.
DeleteI really like your poem. So simple yet I'm able to visualize the deep ocean and it's mysterious ways.
DeleteHello Maegan,
DeleteIt was amazing to see the impact that very few words have to offer in language. While reading your 6 word poem, I visualized massive waves in the middle of the ocean. I can see the sky reflect darkness into the depths of the mysterious ocean. I feel like your choice of words would be perfect for a suspenseful poem.
Birds in the air, so free.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your poem Janel because it makes me think of someone who desires to be high in the sky whenever they see a bird in the air. The image your poem makes me visualize is that of freedom itself. A bird just soaring through the skies without a care in the world is a good representation of what it means to be free. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem.
DeleteThanks for your thoughts Jesse! I love to watch birds fly (and fish in the water for that matter)! This was the first thought that popped into my head when we were told to write a poem and it turned out better than I thought it would!
DeleteHi Janet! I really liked your poem. It made me think more about freedom such as having the ability to go everywhere without restrains ($) and being ourselves without judgment.
DeleteI hope you are having a great weekend
Hello Janel
DeleteGood job on your poem I like how it raises the question of freedom. To me it seems as if you are comparing our freedom to a bird's freedom and insinuating that humans really don't have as much freedom as we think. And if that's what you are trying to say I agree with you. We as humans are regulated and have rules to follow in life, work and in general. I think I would like to be a bird because I could get to places faster without worrying about traffic and be able to travel from one country to another and see the whole world from high above not have to worry about rules and be entirely free.
Mountains and rivers, yet no rain.
ReplyDeleteHi Yesenia,
DeleteThis reminds me of the drought we are facing. The environment is greatly affected by our dry areas. Our mountains and rivers are dry. There was forest fires as well as animals thirsty and hungry. Thanks for sharing!
Hi Yesica! Your poem is awesome in that it's so simple yet common sense! There is a lot of politics that have to do with how much water gets moved around in California. I recently heard a lecture on water and politics and it was very interesting.
DeleteHi Yesica,
DeleteI totally agree with Brittany on this one! I'm thinking of the drought we are facing. Hopefully we get out of this drought in the winter like everyone is predicting. Although, our mountains still look beautiful and aren't as dry as here in the valley.
Hi Brittany, when I wrote the poem the first thing I thought about was the drought. Many things have changed since the drought. One of the things that we never thought about was to conserve water, now the state of California has so many regulations that people need to follow in order to save water.
DeleteHi Mike, some of the politics regarding California can be very beneficial. The through has caused California to loose valuable natural resources and it will continue until rain comes our way. We can only hope that we as Californian’s will not have to depend on politics to obtain water.
Hi Elizabeth, I also hope that rain will come our way according to the predictions. It is true some of our mountains do no look as bad, but they used to be beautiful ten years ago. Thanks for replying and hope you guys have a good weekend.
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ReplyDeleteBarren in Winter; Blossoms in Spring.
ReplyDeleteHi Jesse, I really enjoyed your short poem! It accuarately describes how winter and spring are! Winter is more dry, cold, and not producing much of anything; while spring brings forth new flowers blossoming and the air nice and crisp! Thanks for sharing. Hope you have a great week.
DeleteAh, how I now dread the end of fall. I can see the breath leaving smoke clouds from conversations. I can feel the cold-bite of air opening the front door. The rush of fierce winter, knocking past you, disrupting the nights struggle to keep the homestead warm. I'm dreaming of the thaw and what spring will bring. Thanks for sharing.
DeleteSo little words yet they contain a big meaning to it. Love your short poem Jesse
DeleteDusty Dusty, Winds Gusting Through Valley
ReplyDeleteBrittany, thanks for sharing your poem! It made me visualize Bakersfield, or any other desert place, in the heat! I think my favorite part of your poem is that you repeated the word dusty for emphasis! Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
DeleteI'm assuming this is about Bakersfield because it sounds just like it! I like how you capitalized each word making them all important. Thanks for sharing this.
DeleteHi Brittany, you really made me reminisce on the dust storms we have from time to time here in Bakersfield.
DeleteHi Brittany,
DeleteThis poem makes me think of sneezing. Every time there is dusty air, I always have really bad allergies. It explains our valley air perfectly. I really like the word "Dusty"; I don't know why but it makes me think of a pink color. I'm thinking of a lipstick called Dusty Rose, that is probably why "Dusty" is coming off as a color to me.
Hi Brittany, your poem stood out to me because it reminded me of my hometown. I enjoyed those windy dusty days .
DeleteBoundless contemplation, spring forth, torrid plasticity.
ReplyDeleteFresh cut grass beneath dying leaves ~
ReplyDeleteHi Carly!
DeleteAt first, I imagined our campus and the leaves from the trees on top of the grass. Then, I wondered why the leaves might be dying underneath and connected the point of there being little water. Is that what you meant?
Mike,
DeleteI was kind of just thinking about how some people have managed to keep their grass so alive, but the trees around them are turning brown and dropping their dead leaves onto the grass. Which actually fits with campus perfecto because the grass is still green!
The sense of life going, on as life is becoming dormant. All the things of summer and fall, the soccer, the football, the last bit of BBQ's and maybe a little kite flying. Trying to get as much in under the constant reminder that winter approaches. The smells of fresh cut grass under the layers of falling leaves. It gallops towards us. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteDark sky, dancing lightning, thunder rumbles...
ReplyDeleteHello Carolina! Reading your poem made me paint a picture in my head of a thunderstorm taking place. I love the rain, lightning and thunder so I really enjoyed your poem. (:
DeleteYour poem reminds me of the joy I get when there is thunder and lightening. I truly enjoy dark days because for me I stay home and enjoy hot chocolate and movies all on my own. Great poem.
DeleteHi Carolina, I enjoyed reading your poem because it has a mysterious tone to it. Great job!
DeleteThe sun shines, the flowers bloom.
ReplyDeleteMike,
DeleteThis poem is so simple, but I love it! It reminds me of spring and I love spring. I especially love when the sun is so bright and you can feel the warmth onto your skin. Plus, I love flowers, they are so beautiful.
Sun kissed, oh, summer is here.
Hi Mike, hope you are having a good week. Your poem brings back memories I had as a child. Every spring break, my parents and I would go camping to Los Padres National Forest. It was nice because camping made us love nature even more. Waking up and encountering the first
Deletelights of sun was the best feeling especially with a cup of hot chocolate.
What I like about these poems is that they raise so many questions...the whole idea may have come from Hemingway...look up the origin of the 6 word memoir...his first 6 word memoir was this: for sale, baby shoes, never worn.
ReplyDeleteSee how it raises questions?
Orange, yellow, where has green gone?
ReplyDeleteHi Elizabeth, I liked your poem because I imagined Autumn. It also made me think about how we are getting closer to the holidays.
DeleteHi Elizabeth, I really enjoyed your poem because it represents what’s going on all throughout California. Driving around Bakersfield, or just outside your home, all you see now is that orange/yellow color you mentioned. Front yards or plain open fields are being affected dramatically by the lack or rain and your simple six word poem brought so many pictures of what California looks like today. Great Poem.
DeleteHi Elizabeth, Great poem! It really gives a good visualization of fall and the leaves changing colors. I love the fall and winter seasons, so even though it is sad to see the plants dying, I still enjoy the weather and know that the plants will renew.
DeleteHello Elizabeth,
DeleteI love this one. It reflects that fall is here and spring has left us. I have never known how such small poems will create so much meaning.
Hello Elizabeth,
DeleteI love this one. It reflects that fall is here and spring has left us. I have never known how such small poems will create so much meaning.
Coco, snow, holidays, winter at last.
ReplyDeleteI loved your poem. Winter is my favorite season so reading your poem made me happy for the holidays to come.
DeleteHey Sylvia, I love how your poem reminded me of winter. Its my favorite season because of the holidays. Your poem made me look forward to all the food, gifts, and most importantly family time. Its pretty amazing how six words could do such a thing.
Delete@jazmin thanks! I was definitely thinking about Christmas while writing this.
Delete@jennifer Exactly, and everyone will have many different interpretations.
Hello Sylvia
DeleteI can relate to your poem because I also love winter. I love the decorations, the holiday spirit, the christmas songs, the religious festivities, the shopping sales, and the family bonding. I actually have a christmas station on my pandora and i'll randomly play it throughout the year that's how much I like the xmas carols.The only thing I do not like is the weather I hate the cold weather. I'm a spring and summer girl but other than that I love everything about christmas.
Hi Jazmin,
DeleteI love this poem because of winter and the holidays as well. Winter is my favorite season it seems to bring everyone together. That family as of the season is what I love the most.
Hi Jazmin,
DeleteI love this poem because of winter and the holidays as well. Winter is my favorite season it seems to bring everyone together. That family as of the season is what I love the most.
I love this! I can almost see someone wrapped up in a blanket drinking hot chocolate with the winter cold setting in outside.
DeleteTemperatures drop, rain falls, drought continues.
ReplyDeleteHi Jazmin,
DeleteI hope you are having a good week. I really like your poem; it is interesting because it sounds like you are mentioning all the things that are occurring around the world, except in California. Sadly the drought has caused major river and mountain droughts, that the only thing we can hope for is for things to get better. Thanks for sharing.
Hello Yesica, thank you! I hope you are having a good week as well. Yes, unfortunately this drought has greatly affected California in many ways. Hopefully that changes. (:
DeleteDark and gloomy, yet refreshingly new.
ReplyDeleteHi Jeanette,
DeleteYour poem was one that stood out to me because your use of words are so powerful. Although these poems are only 6 words, yours is one that individuals can relate to. Your poem reminded me of the struggle to success. These words are something people can relate to when they have either failed or been hurt. Dark and gloomy is a phase that one must face to see the sun again. Such hardships make us stronger and "new". I really enjoyed this poem and felt that it would be perfect for a poem about life's lessons.
Thunder, rain, and the sun wins.
ReplyDeleteSpring, leafs fall, flower bed calls
ReplyDeleteHello Jazmin
DeleteSpring is one of the best times of year in my opinion because the weather is amazing and the scenery is beautiful. I am not a winter person I don't like to be cold so I get really excited for spring because I know the weather begins to get warmer meaning that summer is approaching. Also being able to see all the flowers, birds, bees, and the beautiful hummingbirds. Spring brings out all the beautiful colors nature has to offer which is why its one of the most beautiful times of the year.
I really liked your poem. Spring is definitely my favorite time of year. So beautiful out!
DeleteWinter candy apple; Fresh sparkling snow
ReplyDeleteGlobal warming, deforestation, pollution; wildlife, glaciers, extinction
ReplyDeleteHi Karina, This poem was great and it really linked back to the reading for the week. I appreciate how one the left side of the semicolon you mentioned all of the processes that are occurring because of man, and then on the right side of the semicolon you discussed the results of our actions. This poem really made me think about the consequences of our actions and how our planet’s ecosystems are going to suffer greatly if we don’t change some of our habits. Thanks for sharing!
DeleteCities Expanding; nature slowly becoming sparse…
ReplyDeleteGreen grass glowing in the morning.
ReplyDeleteRed roses dipped in morning dew.
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